During the peer reflection my group said that the greatest strengths of this script was that it has a really interesting plot and the dialogue flowed well. They said it was a pretty original story line. I agree that the greatest strength's of this scene are good dialogue and a good plot. The things I am proud of in this scene is how it all pulls together in a sense where it feels like its a situation that could actually happen. I'm also proud of the use of foreshadowing in this scene especially with the character Sheriff Mills. It was foreshadowed well that there would be more problems with him in the future. I also like that the cashier was used to really make it obvious that something strange was going on, yet she did not know either of them.
I think the weakness of this scene is the lack of description as well as the amount of characters. I think so because i felt a slight lack of description in the setting's of this scene. I also think the amount of characters could have been increased making the dialogue and plot longer for this scene. If i was to re-write this scene i would probably write more dialogue and add in more description. I would describe what the isles looked like, what kind of things he had in his cart, what Sheriff Mills was wearing, and what the cashier looked like. I would have made it longer than what it is now. I also may have added some other people in the store and have Daniel talking to them or Sheriff Mills asking a random person in the store what way he had gone.
Over all I think this scene was really well written and I liked it a lot. I'm also glad that my grouped like it a lot.
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