Blog 13

When the class first discussed doing this project I was worried that it would take up too much time and I wouldn't have enough time to finish it. I was also worried that I would not be able to come up with a good enough plot or characters that were life like. Now that it's done I realized it wasn't all that bad and that I actually came up with good characters and a fairly flowing dialogue. I think it would be fun to do again. Maybe not with all the prep work though.
I think that the script outline really helped me map out how i wanted the script to be and what i would need to include. It put it into perspective of what needed to be written about and what the climax needed to be and so on and so forth. The things that helped me the least were the character bios and a lot of the other blogs we did on it. I knew that I would change a lot of what i previously wrote in the blogs. I thought it was a lot of extra things that I didn't really help me. Especially with the character bio's. During the entire script I never used that much description of the characters. I had the character in my head and that was all I really needed, not so much all the random little things about him. I didn't look back at any of the other blogs for help really.
I learned I can actually be really creative while writing this script.
There is a total of twenty-eight pages in my final script. I didn't really manage my time well. Especially since my partner wasn't there much and I got annoyed, but he pulled through in the end. I should have worked more on it though because it would have been cool to get through everything i wanted to. We could have made it longer but we reached writers block a lot too. We sat there for a while thinking about how we would move from one scene to the next.

I think that the greatest strength's of the script are good dialogue and a good plot. What makes me proud of the script is how it all pulls together in a sense where it feels like something that could actually happen. I'm also proud of the use of foreshadowing in some of the scenes especially with the character Sheriff Mills. It was foreshadowed well that there would be more problems with him in the future. I also like that the cashier in one scene was used to really make it obvious that something strange was going on, yet she did not know either of them. Some other good foreshadowing was with Lisa, the Store owner. Although I didn't have enough time to finish the script completely, It would turn out that Lisa was the mother of Daniel who had "died" a long time ago and was now watching her son from a distance. It was foreshadowed when she was all nervous talking to Daniel in the store. I also liked all the description used in that scene. The way we described what the store looked like and everything.
The weaknesses of the script would have to be lack of description as well as the amount of characters. I say this because i felt a slight lack of description of the settings and Daniels house. I also think the amount of characters could have been increased making the dialogue and plot longer for the script. I would improve on description of everything. Like in the scene I used in my other blog, the one in the store, i would probably write more dialogue and add in more description. I would describe what the isles are like, what kind of things he had in his cart, what Sheriff Mills was wearing, and what the cashier looked like. I would have made it longer than what it is now. I also may have added some other people in the store and have Daniel talking to them or Sheriff Mills asking a random person in the store what way he had gone. I think doing that would help make it more life like too. It seemed like there were only three people in the entire store and that wouldn't really happen.
If we had more time on this project I would do what i had explained in the previous part. I would work on my time management better and go back and fix a few things, well i think a lot. There were quite a few of mistakes and things i could have made seem more realistic. Overall though it was a fun experience.

Blog 12

During the peer reflection my group said that the greatest strengths of this script was that it has a really interesting plot and the dialogue flowed well. They said it was a pretty original story line. I agree that the greatest strength's of this scene are good dialogue and a good plot. The things I am proud of in this scene is how it all pulls together in a sense where it feels like its a situation that could actually happen. I'm also proud of the use of foreshadowing in this scene especially with the character Sheriff Mills. It was foreshadowed well that there would be more problems with him in the future. I also like that the cashier was used to really make it obvious that something strange was going on, yet she did not know either of them.
I think the weakness of this scene is the lack of description as well as the amount of characters. I think so because i felt a slight lack of description in the setting's of this scene. I also think the amount of characters could have been increased making the dialogue and plot longer for this scene. If i was to re-write this scene i would probably write more dialogue and add in more description. I would describe what the isles looked like, what kind of things he had in his cart, what Sheriff Mills was wearing, and what the cashier looked like. I would have made it longer than what it is now. I also may have added some other people in the store and have Daniel talking to them or Sheriff Mills asking a random person in the store what way he had gone.
Over all I think this scene was really well written and I liked it a lot. I'm also glad that my grouped like it a lot.

Blog 11

1. In Daniel and Jane's house.
2. Daytime
3. Jane is rambling on about something daniel does not want to do
4. Daniel is eating mike n ikes. random food in the fridge.
5. Daniels face is supposed to be getting increasingly mad, Jane just goes on and on about stuff, daniel gets extremely sarcastic

Blog 10

Dad

Yes, can I have a small popcorn and one of those Mike N' Ikes please?

CASHIER

Three-fifty please.

Daniel's dad pulls out a five dollar bill and gives it to the cashier. The cashier gives him change and the snacks. Daniels jumps up and snatches his Mike N' Ikes.

DANIEL

Thanks dad!

Dad

Anything for my first son. I love you Danny.

DANIEL

I love you too.

Blog 9: Dialogue

JANE

Is that all you're eating for breakfast?

DANIEL

Yeah, actually.

JANE

I don't think so. Want eggs? Do we even have any eggs? I'll make you them however you want. You know what, I don't think we have any. Will you go buy some?

Daniel continues sitting in his chair reading the paper and does not respond.

JANE

Dan! Will you go get some-

DANIEL

Yes, I will.

Jane looks moderately offended by Daniel cutting her off sharply. She begins looking through the fridge.

jane

Oh will you get some milk. I think we need light bulbs too. Some bread would be nice, I'll make you toast. We need laundry detergent too. I'll make you a list actually, there is no way you'll remember everything.

Blog 8

Dialogue has to really show the characters feelings since you can't see it in writing.

The length of the dialogue dictates what kind of story it is and the feeling. Short quick dialogue would make the story intense and exciting. Longer, drawn out dialogue would make it slow and a different kind of emotional.

Talking is taking turns and just back and forth. People interrupt and cut each other off. It needs to be realistic versus back and forth as if they were all extremely polite and well mannered.

Blog 7: hollywood formula

Johns blog post too.

inciting incident: Ajax Moore is going out for a drive through town. Sloan and his 3rd anniversary was coming up soon so he was searching for something to get her. While staring at a little store that caught his attention; someone pulled out in front of him and he hit the other car. The cops were called and insurance information was shared. After all of it the cop pulls Ajax to the side and tells him that he thinks he recognizes him. Ajax assures him the must be mistaken and The cop, Officer Walker, insists that he knows him from somewhere else. After a few minutes Ajax finally gets away and leaves in his car. Still with no gift for Sloan.

Subplot: Ajax and Sloan's relationship becomes challenged as Ajax is off trying to fix the other issues in his life. Sloan does not understand why Ajax is going off all the time and is very distraught, she begins to assume the worse. Ajax refuses to tell her his secrets and wont tell her anything. Important dates and events go by with out Ajax's noticing. This continues to make Sloan very angry.

Having fun: You really get to know Sloan here as she goes away for a little while and stays with her family. She comes back after cooling down and Ajax has a breather from the rest of his problems. Him and Sloan spend time together and you get to know their relationship better and who they are. Simultaneously you see Officer Walkers life. This part is not as upbeat as the rest. You see his internal struggle with obsession and being alone. You really get to know why he has become the way he is.